I walk into my deepest darkest room
forgotten lost and ancient is the place
the atmosphere still dense and full of gloom
a child once striving for a warm embrace
If you have thought of life as something sweet
just wait and look then soon you'll realize
like razor blade apples on trick or treat
You'll take a bite and know it’s full of lies
And now I am here in a wretched state
No place to go I am a helpless man
with only memories to contemplate
the time has passed and nothing that I can
but may I ask you one favor in mind
when you see a lost lonely child be kind
Wow. This poem totally grabs my attention. It is mysterious and deep at the same time, it makes me want to find out what happens next.
답글삭제Here, you used abab cdcd efef gg: well done!
"Deepest darkest" works well as well as "trick or treat" for poetic devices: alliteration although more than 2 words could be even better:)